...The house was not meant to be seen
anymore. It had been ignored and neglected for so long, that it had grown
accustomed to this state of perpetual being. It did not feel the need to be
cared for. It had taken on a life of its own, an independent life that didn’t
want to be bothered. The fact that nearly everyone living on the lake had
forgotten its existence, was exactly what the house had intended. Because to
forget the house had become the same thing as forgetting all that had happened
there.
...
Just as
he left, the window blew open with such ferocity, that it stole Sarah’s breath
away. A frigid gust of wind blew the photos out of the box one by one, and
within mere seconds it stopped. Sarah looked around the room and stopped short.
Each and every picture was lying face up, perfectly still and perfectly angled
for her to see. An icy chill penetrated her body, as she realized that death
was literally staring her in the face.
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Gotta read these stories; these excerpts are great!